on call

[rone]

Nagios schmagios
Ron Echeverri's phone
wakes him up late with a
clamorous beep

Stumbling half-naked, he
somnambulistlically
fixes the problem and
goes back to sleep

Comments

[qwrrty.livejournal.com]

Nice! May I suggest "with clamorous beeps" for the first verse? That avoids rhyming "sleep" with itself.

[ronebofh.livejournal.com]

Hmm, i did think of throwing a 'beep' in there, but i gave up too quickly. Let me fix it.

Whatever you do

[notr.livejournal.com]

don't fix the "lick" out of your somnambulism. OM IS A HOLOGRAM